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He Came With The Rain in work by borda He Came With The Rain in work by borda
my new painting in progress, oil on canvas, I post it specially waiting for any suggestion.
I still need to work a lot on it, I don't really like the hands position and don't know if dressing may needed to be deleted..what do you think?
Thanks!
the final stuff is here [link]
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:iconthe-bails:
The-Bails Featured By Owner Oct 25, 2011
this is gorgeous!
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XblackwolfgirlX13 Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2011
really amazing, I completely love both of their expressions :) i would give advice but I'm only a very amateur artist, so yeah. really good ^_^
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happymouse666 Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2011  Professional General Artist
I really like this borda. You are a fantastic artist. I know you will listen my advice and realize it is not criticism. So here goes.

She is Beautiful I love the enigma in her expression. The crimson and deep blue and chromatic blending is very moving and lush. I love how she softly glows forward and becomes entangled in him.

I don't see a problem with the hands. They need a little fleshing out but no biggy. I think the reason you are focusing on the hands is the balance or composition. I understand that she is stiff for a reason but I think you need to push her pelvis a little forward a little, continuing the curve of her spine. Bend her slightly at the knees giving the hips a little bit of an angle. ( is it a pensive limpness?)

If he was picking her up her her thighs would not be straight. Maybe just push the front thigh back at the joint and put a little curve in the lower tummy? Under his arm should she have a little more rib/ less waist. Take a print of this and trace it out. I just think she looks a little cut in half. She needs a spine.

One of my best drawing from life teachers used to say that some time we become zoomed in on a certain thing and loose perspective of the whole. :peace:
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gagi13 Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
Very beautiful, I can't wait to see it finished! As for the hand position, maybe you could leave her arm as is but with the hand bending at the wrist onto the top of his head.
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joeyv7 Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2011
Very promising work, I'm loving the color contrasts and decorative details you're adding, brings to mind Klimt, of course, but the style is all yours.

Wish it would rain here more often :heart:
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OmriKoresh Featured By Owner Aug 27, 2011  Professional General Artist
the bodies and the background, the concept is good! i really like it! i know it's a WIP so i won't go into detail but what i find bothering, her face
she doesn't have any expression, she looks like a doll head, the bodies are longing hot and fragile but her expression is blank.

try to give her facial expression more depth and charisma then just try to make her look like a narrow version of Angelina jolie.
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Cahula Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2011  Professional General Artist
so far, so beautiful!
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:iconlove-shakspeare:
love-shakspeare Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I love it when you do art like this. Your romantic pieces are always SO beautiful. Please make more. :heart:
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AntonioCollado Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2011
His elbow and hand don't look correct , but they look good. It could fuse and morph into her. Some sort of dressing could be needed to balance the ornaments of her hair, and in that sort of deatil.

So far it looks amazing, especially the anatomy and the light. And the water falling down her abdomen is beautiful and gives the image a mistical atmosphere (it reminds me the wax looking tears on the face of some statue of the virgin)

I thought you had repainted on "my summer wine". It's very dynamic with the man and her ahir pulling her back.
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Yu-u-ki Featured By Owner Aug 26, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I love it!
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oliecannoligriffard Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2011  Professional Traditional Artist
free her other hand on his back - make it not hold him but just there - so she is like: wtf - who is this guy? entirely:) though i just love it as is too:)
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Roderique Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
since you asked, even ~ a bit ~ more clothes would be better in my opinion.

but the painting touches me (no pun intended) on personal level.
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:iconjustaraindrop:
justaraindrop Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2011
amazing work. for some reason i found this image very moving.. :heart:
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:iconsmerle:
SMerle Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2011  Professional Photographer
I like it just the way it is. :nod:
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:iconabstractjet:
abstractjet Featured By Owner Aug 25, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Wow...stunning..so sensual and beautiful!
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Minzile Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011   General Artist
it remindes me of one of those romance-book-covers ^^; . the strange thing is... everybody complains about her hand... but that is the one thing i really like. it remindes me of medival illustrations of saints, it suits the abstract shapes of her "hair". if i was you i'd give her a softer and maybe erotically twisted face. at the moment she looks a bit like an evil barbie doll. oh and keep her dressing ^^, the whole image is so "porn" anyway, why change it by removing such a beautiful dessous. good to see you paint again :eager:
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abcartattack Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011  Professional Traditional Artist
I like the drips on her stomache
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jazzy132 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011
yup the hands are weird and the 'clothes' make it look slutty? lol love the colour palette
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msdawe Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011
My suggestion would be to, yes, fix the hand. It seems very stiff and lifeless, a more gentle pose and living-flesh skin tone would fix that right up. The face is also somewhat like a mannequin. You just want to have the same depth throughout the piece, so you have to live up to the great detail you put into the rain running down their bodies.

One last thing, the rain painted around the crease of her arm where it bends looks a bit like semen. Since that water seems more of a cloudy white than clear. If that's intentional, sweet. If not, maybe I'm the only one who thought that.
Really interesting piece, great work!
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sauco-m Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011
I like it
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:icontapper101:
tapper101 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011  Student Interface Designer
Wow, amazing!
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thandav Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011  Professional General Artist
cool
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:iconxxriku:
xxRiKu Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011  Student
great art!!! great colors! beautiful face of her! <3
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TaintedBlueLotus Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i would like to see the fingers fold or curl up just the slightest bit.
It would make the hand look more romantic.

love the shading in the body
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:iconjesullivan:
JeSullivan Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011
Beautiful loving the rain drops, truly enjoying your creative unqiue art gallery.
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UrsaMinor45 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Normally I dont like any discernible "dressing" on a figure, as it can turn a beautiful nude into a scantily clad girl, and morphs into some varient of porn (at least this is what happens when I attempt such drawings, but that might be my own personal psychosis). However, in this painting, I'm not bothered at all by the undergarments. You have succeeded in portraying such tenderness in the lovers' embrace - it's lovely to behold.

The dressing unmistakably contemporizes the painting. Is this the effect you want, I would ask. Removing the dressing would make the piece more timeless, but less interesting, in my opinion.
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grawr-dinomasaur Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
I love the position of the bodies and how they form together. the colors create a nice atmosphere as well- especially like the bright red tones
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shinius Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'm really happy to see new painting from you ..

as for the hands. I would turn the man ( to have the palm toward the girl) with fingers a bit bent. and the girls hand I would bend the wrist and finger a bit. That said if you wouldnt have said you dont like them I wouldnt have notice anything disturbing in there.

cant wait to see the final product!!
cheers !
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:iconkrullish:
Krullish Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I agree about the hands, although I can't give you anything constructive. It looks great and will looking amazing when it's finished. :) :earth:
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the-Loony Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011  Student General Artist
looks inspired by klimt ^^
very nice!
but her face looks a little sepparated from the rest... a little puppet-like.
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:iconbaron-wolfgang:
Baron-Wolfgang Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I would leave the dressing. Just me tho.
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:icondeus-lux:
Deus-Lux Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Reminds me of Gustav Klimt's work. Well done!
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:iconmaddalinamocanu:
MaddalinaMocanu Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011  Professional Digital Artist
Shouldn't this have a bit of mature content?

aside from that It's beautiful ^_^
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borda Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011  Professional Traditional Artist
there is no nipple or other pink body part beside the lips that may open the gates for the masturbation demon in a kid, lol...the safest way to protect a pure kid's soul from images with nipples is to pull their eyes off...

gizas, gandeste-te doar cate pornosaguri sunt in vitrinele chioscurilor de ziare & stuff, nu cred ca trebuie incurajat puritanismul exagerat :P
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MaddalinaMocanu Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011  Professional Digital Artist
Hmm... Eu ma refeream la zona pubiana e putin cam inchisa la culoare.

Afara de aia arata ca lumea :)

I pity kids :/
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:iconborda:
borda Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011  Professional Traditional Artist
e pierduta-n umbra :P
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CodyJimenezArt Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011
wow! i love this :) the hair is awesome :D
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:iconblacleria:
Blacleria Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
Wow, I really love this! Quite erotic and emotional, with a great combination of colours and forms. :heart:
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Dorran92 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011  Student Traditional Artist
In my opinion the hands are great. All of it is great, amazing even! I love love love the head/hair part and the way you've made the rain so natural without distracting from the subject. I might find the garter/pantyhose-thingy a bit distracting, but all in all I don't see that there should be too much work left to do. But ofcourse, when it's your own work satisfaction always seem very far away... I'm an overworker, myself. I'm really looking forward to seeing the final product, great job.
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Grace14 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011  Hobbyist
really beautiful woman ;)
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GiovyLoCa Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
His right hand could be on her neck instead of "floating", but that's my opinion of course. ;)
Other than that, wonderful colors, I especially love the faces and the color of her hair. :heart:
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borda Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011  Professional Traditional Artist
thanks, good point, the hand stay on the golden section, and have some compositional reasons, but from a more human point of view it makes no sense...:(
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GiovyLoCa Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
It's up to you, it's your work and your taste. If you like it this way, then leave it like this. ^^
As you said, it's more from a human point of view. ;)
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Omnicogito Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is your best work yet. The hands are good, and she reminds me of lady gaga.
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Lea5000 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011  Professional Traditional Artist
lovely, can;t wait to see more. Love the composition.
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Lea5000 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011  Professional Traditional Artist
I like the hand position, it completes the arc and brings your gaze around. And the clothes are just the right amount
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JenniferTheFirst Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
OH WOW, exquisite. So beautiful.
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tiiko24 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Amazing, I love the red underwear! :) Maybe the hand could be kind of drooping in a relaxed way, from the wrist down I mean :D.. if you are going to change it.
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Elianor-Hesperus Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011
Looks pretty perfect to me already ! Seriously, that's amazing. You really got a great style
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:iconborda:
borda Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2011  Professional Traditional Artist
thanks, yes it have small parts where is pretty finished, but still need to work on most of the details :hug:
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